Ooh, it's got those elements of a short story I like -Leaving me wondering. How old is the narrator? Until the end I thought she may be a young woman. The idea that she was also afraid to interrupt her ma..made me think she was much younger, and maybe the mother as grumpy as the woman squeezing her sons hand. Ooh ending surprise I liked. Reminds me of the 1940s how kids were raised. Nice short short :)
Love the closing line because I wasn't expecting it at all. I saw the whole thing. The way he crumpled on the ground and plum.
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Ooh, it's got those elements of a short story I like -Leaving me wondering. How old is the narrator? Until the end I thought she may be a young woman. The idea that she was also afraid to interrupt her ma..made me think she was much younger, and maybe the mother as grumpy as the woman squeezing her sons hand. Ooh ending surprise I liked. Reminds me of the 1940s how kids were raised. Nice short short :)
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